She was tip-toe soft,
kind words and whisper slippers
mid-winter moccasins.
treading cautiously through a world of steel toe-capped hobnailed boots.
Soft-shoe shuffling quietly amidst the stomping and the striding
Reminiscent of dreamlike dawdle at dusk.
She was tip-toe soft, compassion and comfort
Her steps could caress the conscience of even the sturdiest stiff leather loafer.
She was tiptoe soft
Lambswool laughter
words of wisdom suede-like
midwinter moccasins.
© Alison Jean Hankinson
So tonight at d’Verse Bjorn challenged us to write with metaphor in mind. I also wanted to use sounds, and I am not sure if I have mastered this or not, but I gave it a go.
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I really love some of the metaphors here. It really paint the challenge of a kind softspoken person in a world of thugs.
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I sometimes worry that in our current maelstrom we have lost sight of kindness.
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The Prez has set a terrible tone across the land. May that terrible tone be replaced by something more pleasing soon. Very smooth flowing poem.
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Nice line: “Her steps could caress the conscience of even the sturdiest stiff leather loafer.”
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What a lovely metaphor for a gentle woman, Alison, ‘kind words and whisper slippers / mid-winter moccasins.’ It’s not easy to stay gentle in a ‘world of steel toe-capped hobnailed boots… amidst the stomping and the striding’.
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definately way too much stomping at the moment it is deafening.
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I can see her tiptoe soft in a steel-toed world!
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Incredibly well done. You had me a /mid-winter moccasins/ which is delicious and new, and both oxymoron and metaphor.
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A metaforce
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You’ve described an island of comfort and kindness in a harsh world. Well done.
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Such a gentle soft-spoken woman you have described here. Excellent writing
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Such a character you penned by using shoes and walking. I specially like the
She was tiptoe soft
Lambswool laughter
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What an incredible metaphor! You carried the toe-shoe image throughout so beautifully.
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Thank you. Your words are very much appreciated.
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Excellent metaphors here- especially tip-toe soft!
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I’m adoring lambs wool laughter.
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Excellent use of metaphor Alison! Creatively conceived, and very effective!
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