Atonement

The rain washes away the sorrow

It cleanses the impurity of the years before

and soothes the shallow breathing of the old man.

 

Pitter, patter, pitter, patter on the old tin roof

Melodies of days long gone when forsooth

I was a younger man, of stronger mettle.

 

The rain washes away the sin and surrender

Purifies the pungent putrid memories of this life before

Soothes the sallow sagging skeleton that sits beside the bed.

 

Drip, drop, drip, drop, drip, drop on the old tin shed

Reminds me of all the things I still have left unsaid

To those who loved me beyond the bounds of duty and sanity.

 

The rain washes away the pain and the punishment

Washes away the abusive torture and the brutal beatings.

Rain brings reparation for a wretched soul in search of absolution.

 

Pitter, patter, drip, drop, pitter, patter, payday

As my sins have been forgiven I forgive them their sinful way

Forgive my wartime crimes Lord. Take my soul today.

 

© Alison Jean Hankinson

 

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The theme tonight at d’Verse was rain, and it was supposed to be a positive contribution. I spent many years in NZ and rain is often seen as symbolic, it is cleansing or purifying, so in the image (from pixabay) the rain and rainbow would be seen as celebratory. I think atonement is positive but perhaps not quite what would have been expected.

 

Author: alisonhankinson

I am a school teacher and a mum and a red cosmic skywalker, and sometimes a netball coach...but beneath it all I am a writer...

12 thoughts on “Atonement”

  1. We traveled in New Zealand and fell in love with the country. The Maori culture there was fascinating to study — Rain and water as atonement.
    The rhythm of your poem is mesmerizing…the repetition (but not quite exactly the same) has a soothing effect, like the pattern of the rain.
    So very well done. I’m glad you posted to the prompt! 🙂

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  2. A beautiful piece! Right away, “the rain washes away the sorrow.” Yes, water cleanses, and offers new life for all who thirst. In so many places the drought continues, in fact, is on fire. We pray for rain.

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  3. I love the duet of voices, Alison, and the refrain of rainy sound effects. These lines are hard-hitting and poignant:
    ‘The rain washes away the sin and surrender
    Purifies the pungent putrid memories of this life before
    Soothes the sallow sagging skeleton that sits beside the bed.
    Drip, drop, drip, drop, drip, drop on the old tin shed
    Reminds me of all the things I still have left unsaid’.

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