As all around him his benevolent family held hands and wept and wailed,
He rallied momentarily, gave his wife a resolute smile before taking her hand and exhaling his final rasping breath.
They could grieve silently now knowing his torture and pain was gone.
(This is my first ever attempt…never done a Quadrille before… this is for dVerse Poets Pub Quadrille # 21: Take a Breath
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oh i think you nailed this one!
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Thankyou.
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This is the way you wish that passing could be… a moment of peace before you draw that last breath.
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I hope so too. XXX
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Yes, the pain and torture are gone ~ In the final release, there is gratitude ~
And welcome to D’verse Quadrille challenge ~
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Thankyou.
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I have not actually watched anyone die. This is an interesting description of the process.
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I haven’t either, but I think this is what I would want it to be like. The thought of dying alone seems terrifying.
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Good job in capturing many varied forms of breath in 44-words.
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Many thanks.
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Welcome to dVerse and the Bjorn Rudberg created Quadrille. Poignant response to the prompt.
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Excellent first Qaudrille. So descriptive.
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That the torture and pain is gone and that he rallied a smile is comforting
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You set the scene very well. I’ve been there and it truly is a heart wrenching moment, but also a very significant one as a loved one begins a new journey.
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You have captured the image, i imagine some of those gathered held their own breath in that final moment.
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Beautifully expressed!
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Well done – and a bit too true!
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Many Thanks.
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Great!
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many thanks. XX
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